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Okay I got started on a new story but its short really. I'll only post the introduction and after a weak or something like that will post more.

Introduction
Earth had lived for a long time and will for as long as humans will defend it. She is safe, away from where all the fighting actually is, but she's in danger. Even though I have never been on Earth I heard it is a beautiful planet, and mostly covered water, and appearing bright green and bright blue from afar, but this beauty can be destroyed by Shorhans, an evil race of aliens able to become invisible and they live in OBLIVION, the sector that we are afraid of and are supposed to take over. We, humans have fought them over a 58 year period and still a draw in hand. In the beginning we tried to use electric weaponry, and plasma weapons. These weapons were expensive but could have manufactured, but these weapons weren't good against Shorhans so we use the old types of weapons, pistols, RPGs, rocket launcher, shotguns, riffles, sniper guns, machine guns. All of these weapons are based on gun powder and explosion. Some are alien weapons that we stole are being used, small PG, they are powered by small plasma energy but they can't kill, they only break the shields that everyone uses, also another weapon is Enery, a gun powered by stone enery, that explodes after it touch any liquid substance, like blood, water, oil, ink, and even can explode of too much moisture in the air. Combat and gear has evolved over time but weapons and vehicles haven't improved much. We humans now live to survive, to protect what we love, what we care about, and that is the only reason why we fight.

Comments and questions are welcomed.
Hope you enjoyed.

BRAVO! Is there anymore parts to this Sci-Fi genre story>

Wow very nice intro, a few grammatical and spelling error’s. The storyline is very similar to Halo. You might not want to explain too much on the weapons and just stick with the storyline. Please continue this story... ;D

Nice. The Sci-Fi-genre has pretty much been neglected in this forum up to now.
I have to agree with LutiChris, though. You may very well describe the weapons in detail, but it doesn't really fit to a "we-fight-for-the-planet-we-love"-prologue. Also be sure not to repeat the same phrases too often (as long as you aren't using parallelism and the like). Naming the living space of the aliens oblivion is too cheesy for my taste, but well, different people, different opinions.
In the next parts, be sure to tell:
-Who is the main character? Where is he? Not on earth obviously. Has he any kind of special mission etc.?
-Why do the aliens attack earth? What do they look like? How are they organized (like, often aliens appear in some kind of swarm, but they may just as well act like humans) etc.
I guess you planned to mention those things, but those are things that could as well be counted to introduction. Of course, they don't have to be in the introduction , but right now it's a bit too short and doesn't tell you much (On the other ahnd it's also possible to write a looong introduction just about "we-fight-for-the-planet-we-love").
Also:

Quote:she is safe, ..., but she is in danger

A nice intro for a sci-fi. And what it seems to me from the prologue about weapons is that he means to tell how desperately humans fight to defend their home (even with weapons that are not very effective). But still too much details of the weapons for the prologue.